My Revised Tracing Persepolis

Here is my final version of Tracing Persepolis. With help from both Professor David Morgen and my classmate Dan, I have revised my project to include a more extensive analysis within all 3 of my subpages. In my original draft, my argument was unclear and the website lacked some visual media across the board. I worked to sharpen my argument and include more pictures for this final version.

Tracing Persepolis Revisions

For my revised version of my Tracing Persepolis project, I talked more about the relationship between the elements on the page; for example, the shading of the panels, the way the faces were drawn, and the way time and motion are conveyed. Instead of analyzing and looking at the tracings as a whole, I instead focused on one panel at a time. This allowed me to realize what Satrapi wanted to portray through her drawings and how each panel plays an intricate part in the page as a whole.

I also put the two tracings side-by-side in a table on my splash page in order for my readers to be able to compare them without having to continuously scroll down. In one of my subpages, I also linked back to one of Gabi’s pages where we talked about the same panel. I was able to incorporate an idea of hers into my analysis, which I feel like helped strength my discussion on the relationship between the elements on the page. Overall, I feel like my revised version allowed my readers to better understand the reason why the panels were drawn a certain way and how this impacted the overall layout of the memoir.

Tracing Persepolis: Revised

Over the spring break, I have revised my Tracing Persepolis project. Through discussions and suggestions from my professor David Morgen, I’ve added more in-depth analysis on what impact do the points that I have investigated have on the readers and their reading experience. In addition to this, I’ve re-arranged my formatting after reading over Dan’s project. After the revision, my arguments have become more fluent, more detailed and easier to read.

Tracing Persepolis Revisions

Complex lines marked in sand

Once your Tracing Persepolis revisions are completed, publish a post on your site that links to the splash page for the project.  Include one or two paragraph where you describe your revision strategy for the project. Explain what you changed and why, and how the revised version of the project is stronger than the draft that you published before spring break?

 

(image credit: “Traces in the Sand” by Flickr user fdecomite)

Tracing Persepolis Revision

I have revised my Tracing Persepolis  discussion. I received helpful critiques from my professor David Morgen, and realized a valuable point of view by reading a similar discussion that Sam Balogh wrote. I also learned how to format my pictures to have them lay side by side on the page. I used all of this information in my revision of my discussion. I feel that I have increased the quality of the work overall. I will continue to revise slightly as I find places where I can improve the discussion. If anyone has any suggestions or comments post them in the comments section of this blog post or on the respective pages.

, Greer

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