Category: Student Posts

After reviewing my Tracing Persepolis Project project, I changed not only the formatting but the connection between the first and the second tracing’s analysis. I turned it more into a splash page, relating it to the project of another student’s. I used my second tracing analysis to relate to my first so that the project can be read as the first page analysis, then the second relating to the two’s similarities and differences. (slo3)

After taking the time to review my Tracing Persepolis project, I decided to change several things.  First off, I simplified the splash page because I thought it contained unnecessary background information.  Second, I added more annotations about style to my page 133 tracing.  Third, I revised my themes page and corrected my analysis of page 153.  Before, the analysis was not focused directly on the themes found on the page.  However, now it ties in with my analysis of page 133 and offers better insight into the themes presented on page 153.  Finally, I added analysis to my style page that relates my project to another student’s.  Lily’s project specifically made me think differently about my style analysis of page 153.

The revisions for my Tracing Persepolis project are complete. First I met with Professor Morgen and watched the video he made of himself going through my project. My revision strategy for the project was to follow his advice and dive deeper into the analysis I had already established. Many of my claims were extremely broad so I went back and examined the fine details of the pages to determine what they told me. I also inserted additional visuals into some of the pages and added a short passage connecting to one of my colleague’s project. This revised version of the project is superior to the draft I had previously published because I added more thorough analysis of the different aspects of the pages that helped me form a stronger argument.

I have completed the final revisions on my Tracing Persepolis project. The most dramatic revision I made was I added another component of analysis to my project–visual patterns. This page has two subpages–the veil and the mirror. I used this component to give deeper insight on the small details of the two traced pages. Also, I cut out some of the seemly unnecessary analysis I had previously included on my other two pages–the layout and the mood. Also, my original draft was a little confusing because I intermixed mood and layout between the two pages, so I went through and tried to cut all that out so the two components were completely separate. Also, I added a picture to the splash page and imbedded a fair amount of photos onto my pages to break up the text and make the project more visually appealing.

Here is my final version of Tracing Persepolis. With help from both Professor David Morgen and my classmate Dan, I have revised my project to include a more extensive analysis within all 3 of my subpages. In my original draft, my argument was unclear and the website lacked some visual media across the board. I worked to sharpen my argument and include more pictures for this final version.

For my revised version of my Tracing Persepolis project, I talked more about the relationship between the elements on the page; for example, the shading of the panels, the way the faces were drawn, and the way time and motion are conveyed. Instead of analyzing and looking at the tracings as a whole, I instead focused on one panel at a time. This allowed me to realize what Satrapi wanted to portray through her drawings and how each panel plays an intricate part in the page as a whole.

I also put the two tracings side-by-side in a table on my splash page in order for my readers to be able to compare them without having to continuously scroll down. In one of my subpages, I also linked back to one of Gabi’s pages where we talked about the same panel. I was able to incorporate an idea of hers into my analysis, which I feel like helped strength my discussion on the relationship between the elements on the page. Overall, I feel like my revised version allowed my readers to better understand the reason why the panels were drawn a certain way and how this impacted the overall layout of the memoir.

Over the spring break, I have revised my Tracing Persepolis project. Through discussions and suggestions from my professor David Morgen, I’ve added more in-depth analysis on what impact do the points that I have investigated have on the readers and their reading experience. In addition to this, I’ve re-arranged my formatting after reading over Dan’s project. After the revision, my arguments have become more fluent, more detailed and easier to read.

In my final product of my Tracing Persepolis project I made a few changes. I went more into depth about my claims regarding the darkness used in each of the panels I chose. I also further supported the themes that I discussed. I used Gaby’s flow of her pages to better link my pages together with hyperlinks.